Abandoned but not alone by Theresa L. Henry
1. Good thing you're an adult cause your parents couldn't afford to feed you
2. Hiding behind a grown stranger
3. A blurted chicken story
Needing Nita by Norah WilsonHere is an example of the writing in this book "She'd only had" ---> translates to---> 'she had only had'
2. Over usage- its annoyance to read over and over
3. Sometimes we write the way we talk to make our characters more realistic
4. Passive-aggressive: as the author its your story, take control and make me believe it
5. Feel a bit ameteur. I don't have the same complaint with GRRM or Anne Rice or James Patterson.
The Admission by Jamallah Bergman
This book had so many errors, annoying characters, and No I'm not a hypocrite, I'm admit to being awful with grammar and I'm not charging for people to read my blog, it's free. So, if you're going to charge readers you will come under fire for having grammatical errors.
"She stopped to straightening her clothes and took a deep..." should have been "Straighten"
The characters father is supposed to be verbally abusive (always negative and hurtful), but his lines to her aren't that hateful.
Location 680 or so:
"I like it the way it was, Cathy, I would appreciate it if you wire it the way it used to be for the party"
In my mind this is a case of "Don't talk about it, be about it" If the character uses his words as ammo than demonstrate that. Don't tell me 5011 (yeah, I stole that from my lil cousin) times that he's mean to her. Show me.
Though this is a gorgeous cover and I'm not afraid to try something else by this author.